Dear mum & dad

Great poem =) It really made me think about my family problems that I have, and it's really quite emotional to some people. I liked the flow, and overall the poem was great. 5/5 =) xoxo

Samantha

Be careful...U may be hurt...

A lot of strong emotion in this. I like the lines

So take my heart and rip it out,
and leave my soul to bleed,

Great write keep it up.

I think the strongest part in this poem is this:

Friends are also important,
because they keep me strong,
They always pick up the pieces,
when you do something wrong,

I think the weakest part in your poem is this:

You push me to the limits,
taking all the money I have got,
Love is what is important to me,
so you can have the lot!

It just sounds sort of: thrown together. It is an excellent poem but that is the only part I disliked.

Great job on this.

>black&&blue

Darien I didn't explain that i'd been in care since i was 6. sorry about that, should have made it clearer :D