Very sad poem. But I thought it was good. I loved how you repeated the first two lines of the first stanza in the ending stanza. Thought it was great.

I don't think there's anything I'd change. It was great. Keep it up! 5/5

`Taleee. xx.

Hmm, really angsty poem. I'm sure that's now how your parents really feel. It's just that you are rebellious and want things your way. Well, you can't always have things go your way. It's a fact. People make sacrifices and they give up great things just to stay happy. I'm sure your parents are not out to get you. If they were, you would not have grown up. You would have been dead before birth. Remember your parents took care of your your entire life. No one else has done that. Anyways, your poetry is full of emotion, but it lacks a lot of thought. You really need to start thinking when you write. But keep on trying, you will learn as you grow older. Enjoy and take care.

I like this poem. It is very well written. keep up the good work! Please check out mine if you get a chance.

Darien I didn't explain that i'd been in care since i was 6. sorry about that, should have made it clearer :D

I think the strongest part in this poem is this:

Friends are also important,
because they keep me strong,
They always pick up the pieces,
when you do something wrong,

I think the weakest part in your poem is this:

You push me to the limits,
taking all the money I have got,
Love is what is important to me,
so you can have the lot!

It just sounds sort of: thrown together. It is an excellent poem but that is the only part I disliked.

Great job on this.

>black&&blue

A lot of strong emotion in this. I like the lines

So take my heart and rip it out,
and leave my soul to bleed,

Great write keep it up.

Be careful...U may be hurt...

Great poem =) It really made me think about my family problems that I have, and it's really quite emotional to some people. I liked the flow, and overall the poem was great. 5/5 =) xoxo

Samantha