I like this poem. It is very well written. keep up the good work!

Raised so high up, only to be knocked down
[I really really liked that one line. It stood out so much to me!]

This was a really good poem. I loved it. The way you ended it aswell was great. You used excellent vocab and imagry. I don't think there's a thing wrong with this poem. I wouldn't change it one bit. Keep it up!! 5/5

`Taleee. xx.

I love this part:

My mind is absent of all thoughts
Purposely, of course, to spare my heart
Yet you try so hard to break that barrier
And claim it as your own once again

Good job hunn. I like it. =D It is a very sad piece but has a strong meaning.

>black&&blue

Gr8 poem. very good rhythm. good job:)

Powerful! U express ur emotions very, very well! I dont know there is just a very powerful feeling in this poem, and its kewl! U also did good in the grammar section lol. And u used good word choice, nice flow... it was just a really good read=) Good Job! 5/5

~+Megan+~

Hmm, I liked the ending. That first line was really good. It seems like you are questioning your strength. It was contradicting, saying you have 'no doubt' yet, thinking you aren't strong enough. That was just.. strong. lol

A powerful poem, I really enjoyed it.

Very good writing. I feel so me in this poem. Keep it up! =)

xoxo sammycakes

Really liek it! 5/5!!

I loveeeee this poem..it was amazing the last stanza was my favorite it was a great ending to and even greater poem! you did a wonderful job on this one!!

Interesting write. I felt a contrast of emotions coming from this poem, there was longing and fear of the same thing. I have to be honest and say for me the flow was on and off in places as well as a couple of cliche parts. Nevertheless I enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing.

Hey that was an excellent poem keep it up ..check some of mine out

That's a good job. 5/5
-Kakashi

Thanks for your comments.

Very good

Hey darl a very touching piece. lot of emotion. very heartfelt and powerful thank u for ur comment on my poem meant alot keep it up xx

!fhsgdugj ah lucky you have over 18 votes on each poem ;p
I'm not sure if i commented back from ages when you .. commented on my poem. but yeahhhhh.x

"The happy tone in my voice is nothing but
A mere knowledge of knowing what not to say"

By far the best line in this poem, classic wording nicely pieced together.

I think there were a few ares that stunted the flow of the piece and you may be able to prevent this by reading your poem out loud a few times to see where you lose rythm.

Keep it up!

Bret

Love the poem!! thanx for the comment. . Ya i do love that guy. . .But that guy after a year breaks up with me for a girl he JUST met but idk. . Still love the poem

5/5! Great poem!!!

Nice job..very well written..please comment and rate my pomes...thanks ~DARK~

Yet another good one!!!