Comments : Vows of Love

  • 18 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    Wow, it is a great poem written by a pro, i like symbolizim in this poem. it is great.5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    Good use of vocab in this write, your vivid and beautiful descriptions painted a lovely marital picture.
    In the first stanza, the rhyme of kiss and bliss I found to be very predictable, not good in a poem of this quality.
    Also I thought "come out" in the third stanza was poor wording and should be rethought.
    I thought the ending was very sweet. Overall, a good and touching write.

  • 18 years ago

    by BrokenMisery

    Love is always so cute. just to point out, you seen to have the rhyme scheem a,a,b,b but your first stanza's first two lines don't rhyme. You used very complex, well worked language and described it nicely. Perhaps the ending could have had more power and I haven't been to a wedding but when you say "I do" and kiss do people actually shout? I'm not sure, anyway it was nicely worded, great work keep it up.

  • 18 years ago

    by Tainted Beauty

    "Nothing in life will ever be as joyful as this"

    I loved that line. In fact, i loved the whole poem, it captured the love and warmth between this 2 people. I really enjoy reading your work, keep it up.