It had a nice flow very nice. I related to it a lot. 5\5 take care. Love you to comment on any of mine

This is a very good poem Jovi!! I always feel like that! Good JOb!! I love ya!! 5/5 hehe

Jov, you DON'T have to be bad to feel complete..because no matter how much you think that's the solution, it's NOT...if you do something bad, it will just make you feel EMPTIER and even MORE depressed!!! Don't let him get to you. Don't let ANYONE get to you. I love you more than the WORLD!! I love you more than ANYTHING!! and you matter so much to me! Don't tell yourself you don't matter to anyone...cuz I LOVE YOU!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! xo

That was OUTSTANDING!I give it a 5 all the way.I can relate to this one alot too sometimes but I hope you dont hurt anymore.

Wishing you the best of luck with life
Kayla Michelle

Nice work. =D 5/5 This stanza really stands out to me:

"There is just "now", and then there is "gone"
Confiding in my empty soul.
I forgot how to cry.
Falling to pieces.
Scared to live...Not to death, it doesn't scare me anymore.
Trapped in this hourglass falling with everyone else."

Congrats on a great poem, really touching. =)
xxx

True true...i feel u dog! lol i know i already commented this one...but i wanted to again...because basically this poem is amazing...and YOU'RE amazing...and also...i'm extremely bored and that has a lot to do with it! lol Hey Jov..."remember that time when you tried to fit in the floaty with me at the pool?" hahahah we are such DORKS!! lol even though that was just today...haha i love you more than...umm...peanut butter loves jelly!! lol oh yeah...and i wrote a new poem...not the one u commented on...lol it's a different one...so u should check it out...even though it pretty much SUCKS compared to ALL your writing! lol
"hopes to be like you-o-o" (haha ur funny lol)!!
Hearts foreva and eva!!

Haha dude...i just read ur comment from my other poem saying "we're gonna have so much fun on the retreat!!" YEAH RIGHT! lol i had fun with YOU though...like dude...that ice cream was effing AMAZING! lol i have never tasted anything so incredible in my entire life! haha...we were PRETTY cracked out...lol it was fun when i was just with u..but everything else SUCKED! haha im so glad we're home! good poem..AGAIN! lol luv u!! xoxoxox

"The yelling drowns out the pattern of my screams"...LOVE it...it's my favorite part! (this is jessie by the way) haha...i miss u girlie...we should hang out this weekend...we haven't had just Josie time in awhilel! lol I HEART U LOVELY!! xoxo
p.s. will you be my date for homecoming? haha jk lol but we are going together right? cuz im confused on the whole who we're going with thing haha

!!! that poem was very nice and I enjoyed reading it
Its poems like these that make me happy I happened to come upon them
Great job and keep writing porfavor (please, haha)

If you could please read/rate my poem Classic Love Song, I appreciate it
I return the favor if you comment back

Great poem!! Very true but i don't think alot would understand the message. great writing!!