What was once a diffucult path
turned into a bottomless pit
sleeping without dreams
crying without tears
[I liked those lines alot. I thought they were great!]

It was a sad poem. But good. I thought you could make it a little longer, but I like it the way it is now. Keep it up. =) 5/5

Natalie``

I really like urs too! are u rlly 21?

Its an awesome free verse.. I really liked it..
I loved the last quote you've added, thought it was amazing..
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LoNeLY. . .