Great work on this, usually when people wirte haikus, they mess up the syllable count, but you did it perfectly, i liked your theme and your words were well chosen, great work.

--Steph

For your first attempt I thought it was quite good. I've only done one haiku. But I don't think it was as good as this one. I liked your choice of wording too. It was great. Keep it up! 5/5

Natalie``

For a first attempt this is good. The essence of Haiku is to capture the theme in a short and structured style so you must choose words carefully. I think you achieved this well.
Try out some more!