Hollow Promises.

by SaveMe?   Jul 20, 2006


Hollow promises
Bleeding eyes
Soulful whispers
Meaningful lies

Damp houses
Rotting floors
Holey ceilings
Un-hinged doors

Morbid thoughts
Killing stares
Horrible comments
Nasty glares

Untouched harts
Deafened lives
Broken friendships
Mournful cries

Unanswered prayers
Wasted years
Careless actions
Dreaded fears

Tightened ropes
Spiteful hisses
Drowning darkness
Pointless wishes

Uncaring gestures
Hurtful words
Highest hopes
Screams unheard

Bloody tears
Vanished friends
Scaring memories
Here it ends

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  • 18 years ago

    by Kylie

    Wow, i definitely agree with Brianna. You really brought a lot of emotion into those short lines. It's really quite deep and i enjoyed reading it.

    *Truly Fantastic*

    x.xBrokenx.x

  • 18 years ago

    by Ariana

    The detached tone you write with here is very effective and I liked the impersonalness (I just invented a word) because it was as if you were writing either from the view of someone watching the situation or from someone who has experienced it all and sees the entire picture. Really effective, nice write :)
    ~Ariana

  • 18 years ago

    by Brianna

    Its amazing how u can bring out so much emotion in 2 word lines! great poem..keep writing..that was brilliant! 5/5! luv ya!

  • 18 years ago

    by Bitt3rSw33t

    Amazing writing...i can tell you are very much so connected with your emotions...very good

  • 18 years ago

    by ashley

    I love your poems. and thanks for the comment. =) this poem is short, but the words have so much meaning into it. i love the unanswered prayers, its so true.