by Goran Rahim
Again a sad poem for all of you |
by freshta
Hahahahahahahahaha |
by Natalie
It's a pretty sad poem really. I thought it was pretty good though. The 2nd last stanza stood out the most to me. Keep it up! |
by Nelle
Aww that is sad, but really good! you did a great job on this one 5/5 |
Awww s0 sad!!! i d0nt find it funny at all... ;S neway, a beautiful j0b 0nce again! 5/5 |
by desigirl
Like always a great poem again. You do speak in your words. It seem like you mean every word you write.I really like the idea, THE LUCKY GUY, but trust me whoever is he, he is not lucky because his girl can not see true love. I really feel bad for him and for this girl. |
by courtney
Thats really sweet yet really sad but a great poem 5/5 |
by shela
Awwwwwww, |
Very full of emotion. I liked the story behind it. It was very sad. The flow was off a bit, and some of the rhymes seemed a tad bit forced, but all in all it was a good poem. My favorite stanza was: |
Not bad at all... I really liked it. It's a twist from the rest of the love poems you hear, eh? |
This is llsweet and sad and despairing. I loved the way you framed it as a letter. |
by Tormented
The last lines were beautiful! |
by Truest Lies
Although the rhyming pattern of the poem was not flawless, there was still shaky emotion piercing through, heart-burning sorrow underneath brave words. |
Hmmmm..............if i comment it wont be very possitive......i know u don't want me to lie and i can't praise u for wat i think is nt true....the poem is ok........but i liked the other ones much better..i indeed liked the last four line of this poem...it was very strong..it was sad very sad.......ur not selfish Goran i know that much........by the way u write and express ur feeling..that much this poem proves....iam looking forward to more new poem |
by Catherine
I liked this poem, but I found soem of the rhymes really...not good. For example, alot of the time you rhymed 'you' with 'you' and i think that took away. Also, Loving and Asking don't rhyme. |
by Kaylee
Yes this poem is heartfelt, yes in a way it is sort of beautiful, but in reality the poem in itself is extremely repetitive and the girl you describe shows us nothing about her. The luckiest guy is alright. Maybe he is lucky. Maybe he doesn't deserve her. But how do we know that. You tell us more than you show. As a narrative it's alright. As a poem, it coould have been a bit more decent. |
by lexie
Awwwww.that was soo amazing sweet.whoever this girl is she really doesnt kno how lucky she is.to have such a wonderful guy like you waiting for her.beautiful poem:D |
by Goran Rahim
Kaylee, it supposed to be a poem, not a story :) and it is dear the luckiest guy not the luckiest girl, that s why no need to write about her. I think I have done that in other poems. |
by Ashley
Hey this is kinda a sad poem..But it is really good...So keep up the good work!!!! |
You are so talented. I have added you to my list of favorites. 5/5 Loretta |