Comments : The Luckiest Guy

  • 18 years ago

    by Chelly

    I really like this one and i bet someones felt that way before

  • 18 years ago

    by Sweet MeMoRiEs

    Beautiful

  • 18 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    You are doing well ...some of this reminds me of the pure love expressed by the master poet Kahlil Gibran in his book 'The Prophet ... google it

    When love beckons to you follow him,

    Though his ways are hard and steep.

    And when his wings enfold you yield to him,

    Though the sword hidden among his pinions may wound you.

    And when he speaks to you believe in him,

    Though his voice may shatter your dreams as the north wind lays waste the garden.

    For even as love crowns you so shall he crucify you. Even as he is for your growth so is he for your pruning

  • 18 years ago

    by Robie Lincer

    Goral! You are a talented writer,,, and i know exactly how you feel there,,, for i loved a girl who had some1 else,, and you said all my feelings there in your poem! good work :D

  • 18 years ago

    by Megann Lee

    Awh, that's really sweet. I loved your wording choices, and te structure, and flow was great.

  • 18 years ago

    by AnnMarie

    Great poem, there was alot of good structure and the flow was really nice!!

    Thanks for your comments,
    -AnnMarie

  • 18 years ago

    by Bhavin

    Aahhhh... i haven't read other people's comments. i don't want to get inspired by reading the previous comments. but i know how it feels when something like this happens.... brain gets numb.... hands shiver.... tears fight to come out of eyes.... i felt the same thing when i wrote "its her wedding today" and "just for a bit of change"

    5/5. this poem touched my heart!

  • 18 years ago

    by awww

    Wow... words that are so true... everyone at some point feels this way... so heartfelt... keep up the good work

    ~angel~

  • 18 years ago

    by Mommy And Me

    I really enjoyed reading this poem
    sept it shows that you still love her even tho you say
    "Because the girl who I loved, is your lover."
    or
    "Even though I loved her a lot."

  • 18 years ago

    by Mommy And Me

    And sence i accidently clicked send i shall continue here...
    so the Love vs. Loved thing sorta threw off the poem a little.
    In stanza 5 repeating the word SAD makes it seem a little pulled apart..
    maybe if you use sad in the first verse of stanze 5 and a synonym for verse 3, it will give it a more dramatic affect
    other then that i think its a great poem and well writen.

  • 18 years ago

    by Sarah Ann

    Awww, beautiful and sad. I love it omg...you are just so amazing. After reading this small amount of your heartfelt love poems I think you are taking a place on my favorites. I will be back to read more. Keep it up and take care.

  • 18 years ago

    by nichole

    I like it its sad sry 4 ur lost love but you'll find some1 who can tell u that they love u again just think of it it that way k

  • 18 years ago

    by DaddysLittlePrincess

    Wow that was really good i could really relate except i would be writing it about a girl being lucky lol but anyways i really liked it!

  • 18 years ago

    by Just Lucy

    Awww u really are fantastic at expressing your feelings!!! keep it up

    xoxo Lucy

  • 18 years ago

    by Ashley

    Your a real good poet

  • 18 years ago

    by mandieD

    How sad it is when those we love don't love us back.
    been there many times. great way to express these feelings is through poetry and you did a great job with this one.

  • 18 years ago

    by AllHailTheHeartbreaker

    Really sweet poem. Truly original. I liked how you formatted it like a letter--totally brilliant.
    5/5
    [Tragic]

  • 18 years ago

    by mrhope

    Nice poem and I feel the pain

  • 18 years ago

    by Jessica

    Awww.. this was good.. it flowed pretty well, had good descriptions, and was filled with emotion.. there are a few grammer mistakes that you should fix, but other than that.. nice job! 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by myshiningstar14

    I enjoyed it..it was different.. great jobb. wow.

    Lissa