Bleeding Away...

by Ashleigh   Jul 21, 2006


Blade Sliding Through,
Refuse To Take It Out,
Wont Say A Word,
I'll Just Scream And Shout.

Looking Into My Eyes,
You Can See The Fear,
I Wont Let You See Me Cry,
Not Even A Single Tear.

Don't Think Less Of Me,
Its The Last Thing I Need,
You're Standing There Beside Me,
Just Watching Me Bleed.

You Say I Need Help,
But I Wont Admit It's True,
You're The One That's Done This To Me,
So Now Why Should I Trust You?

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  • 18 years ago

    by Lecrissa

    Well writen, full of emotion. keep writing

  • 18 years ago

    by Natalie

    Just like everyone else has said, this is a pretty powerful poem. Really drags the reader in. But, I do have to agree with Darien, I didn't think the ended fitted with the rest of the poem. Great job though. 5/5

    Natalie``

  • 18 years ago

    by Truest Lies

    Would Have Been Nicer Without The Capitals, but as it is, it had a simply rhyming pattern that was easy and enjoyable.
    About the theme, that was very dark, and it has been overdone *sigh* it's so terrible that the whole world feels this.
    But, still, it is a good poem.

    //T.L.//

  • 18 years ago

    by Darien

    Powerful.

    I thought it was a great poem. Nice job on it. The only thing is, I didn't like the message at the end. Telling people to join.

  • 18 years ago

    by Wings Of Flames

    Hmmm.
    I like it.
    Its very good for your first poem
    ~Emah
    5/5

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