Beautiful Lie

by Fallen~Tears   Jul 21, 2006


Beautiful Lie

Our friendship or our romance
In the summer of 1962
was the summer i\'ll never forget
it was the summer I met you

Hot summer days,
& sneaking out at night
swimming in the lake
with nothing on but the moonlight

Laying in the grass
& wishing on the stars
promising \"forever\"
& calling this summer \"ours\"

Holding me in your arms
& dancing in the street
You came out of nowhere
and swept me off my feet

Wrapped up in a blanket
& saying the words \"I love you\"
I just simply smiled
and said I loved you too

That was the night
Thosse lines were crossed
The night we found eachother
and our innocence was lost

I woke up with you
lying next to me in bed
You told me you couldnt do this anymore
you were in over your head

You kissed me on the cheek
& said good-bye
I couldn't understand,
how could this happen, why?

years later I got my answer
She was pregnant with your son
You told me I was the one you loved
but you had to be there for him, you couldnt just run

Now that I know
im not sure I wanted to know why
I was just a girl
wrapped up in another man's beautiful lie

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  • 18 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    Very nice ending! A bit cheesy, lol, but I LOVED the ending. It brought everything together. And please type out the word 'and'! That bothers me!

    xDarkSuicidex 5.5

  • 18 years ago

    by Lovely Bones

    "Holding me in your arms
    & dancing in the street
    You came out of nowhere
    and swept me off my feet"

    ^ I lvoed reading that stanza... it's like my eyes just floated over a cloud. lol, if that makes sernse to you.

    This poem was really sad, and what happened to you in this poem was sad but at the same time it was sweet how you didn't start writing at the end about crying and ploting about how to kill this man who took your 'innocence'. So even though it was sad, it was still very sweet.

    Keep it up!

    Take Care and God Bless,
    Sarah-Joy

  • 18 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    A nice poem, I enjoyed reading it, keep it up and 5/5 cause it deserve it.

  • 18 years ago

    by sibyllene

    Sad... : ( I do really like the line "with nothing but the moonlight on." heh heh. i'm just going to mention some grammatical and punctuation stuff.

    capitalize the "I's"
    stanza 2 line 2 - it's spelled "sneaking"
    st. 2 line 3 - i don't think you need that comma, but it's up to you
    st. 4 - "nowhere" is one word
    st. 5 - "too" instead of "to"
    stanzas 9 & 10 - apostrophes in the words "couldn't" and "man's."

    ok! i think that's it. that's just stuff that doesn't change the content of the poem, but it can effect how the poem is perceived or appreciated. as far as the actual poem goes, there's only one line i'd change. i think something like "lying next to me in bed" would flow better than "next to me lying in my bed." all in all, great job telling a story! i really liked the title as well

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