I like this it is sort of like a story, i like how you wrote that. it's deep. i have a new poem and it would mean so much to me if you read it and told me what you think. it's called Evanescent. thanx so much Shanik B

Wow that was wicked good i am yea wow dunno wut to say but wicked good job 5/5

I LOOOOOOOVE this poem!!!!

I love this!!

A great imaginitive poem.. excellent read 5/5 xx

That was Dammmm** Good
You like freestyles and raps?
if you do, i got some if you look at some more of my poetry After the To You Katie part..some of those are all freestyles and raps..
i loved it
My only Critique i can give
was it was a little too long
if you plan on making a long poem
Make a Series Like i do
Make it like a season on tv,
have ppl astounded on the end
and just want to read more
and cant wait to read the next
attracts a lot of viewers
Good job
Heartfelt
sad
Excellent Rhymes
keep up the great work
5/5
~MF~

Wow. That was awesome especially since it was long. Thanks for sharing. It was beautiful.

Wow that was intense...but very good. I really liked it. Great job.

O.o; That is a long poem, but it's very good! I give you a 5.

Wow that poem captivated me ..very interesting

Wow...I don't know what to say..This is so sad..But very very good..Wonderful job..5/5...Keep up the great work...
Crystal

I loved this poem, you write excellent work. thanx for commenting me. 5/5*

AwW, i dont know what to say...that poem was so dark and heartbreaking! Great work,indeed.You wrote an awesome poem, keep it up! 5/5
Best wishes,

TILLmyLASTtearFALLS

Nice poem! so awesome! it was a bit long and i got bit distracted but heaps good and good use of words i had a very good image in my head...thnx for the comment on my poem.. wish you well on future poems.. :P :D :P

Excellent poem. 5.

That is amaizing....i love it

It was long but I was so into the story the length didn`t bother me at all. For someone so young you really think deep, very good. look forward to more. hope you will tell me what you think of mine.

...wh0a. that's crazy. great narrative ^.^ good job on the rhyme scheme and flow

Hey thanks for your comments on my poem...i really loved this poem, its so deep and moving and you feel as if it is actually happening or as if your actually there...keep it up, your a seriously good poet! xxx

Wow i never seen this style before. all of them have rhymes! i can feel that DRAMA wen u have to decide who u want to save. it's a long poem and it's really good!

Adrian