Wow. This was amazing. Very well worded aswel. You kept my attention from start to finish. A really great piece. Keep it up! 5/5

Natalie``

Well,
you caught me on this one lol
I find vampire's fascinating and you portray the kiss and thoughts of a vamp to what i think it is like..
I could never put it in a poem quite like this... 5/5

Excellent hunn. =D I love it. BAD VAMPIRE! STAY AWAY! oh sorry. Fear of vampires. =]

I love how you had it in free verse style.

>black&&blue

An excellent poem, wonderful use of alliteration and assonance.

-biscuit-

Very well written yet again. 5/5 I really liked how you went from a romantic kiss to something with hatred enough to kill the one you loved. Great job! xoxo

¤ Samantha ¤

Wow...This Kept Me Drawn To It From Start To Finish! Great Poem! I Enjoyed It 5/5
Love,
Steph

I love the flow of this one. The Rythym was amzing aswell. I really liked your detail. Great Job.

WOW! Hunni I am completely and totally speechless...i LOVED this poem..I can't quite make out if it was sad or not tho...lol i dont think it was..but it was very interesting you have a great imagination the imagery was perfect! there isn't a thing i would change you wrote it beautifully! great job! 5/5

ohhh and this line
Pulse steady ad rhythmic
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I think the 'ad should be and' but idk!

This is an amazing poem!
Really, really good

Ah thats kinda scary! Very powerfully written, your choice of words was perfect. 5/5
- Polly

Wasnt how i expected. flowed okay. i liked it. not your best though.
xxxx

Fangs pressed into resisting flesh
Pushing, plunging deeper
Lips locked against your skin.

^^^Loved those lines!

Your vocab in this was really good. I don't see any flaws at all. Wow. I'm kinda speechless. This was great! Keep it up! 5/5

This was a really good poem... I loved it so much!!!

This poem has it all life,death,sex,satiability of innocence.
Great poem!5

I really liked this, I thought the imagery and wording was excellent.
I also enjoyed how it was similar to a story, at least that's how I found it.