I really like the "my friend" ending of every other line throughout the poem up until the last stanza, and then the fact that you end the last one with something similar. It all ties together extremely well. Great stuff.

Like above, i loved the "my friend" repitition, it made the poem flow very well indeed.
Keep writing
xxxxxxx

Awww!! this has a really sad ending but it has really good flow.. I like it heaps, It good as.. keep up the good work..