That was awesome, it was really good, and sad. I thought it was very well done
keep it up, my friend

Tara-Kay

That had a really good ending I think I might have to read it again though because I don't think I got the full meaning of it. but good job. and in one part the ryhmn seemed little forced "And I was right, not saying that you were never
But this time I was clever enough to see right through the weather"
but I don't know matbe its just me.

~~Retniapdoolb

This was good, but i found some of the rhymes were forced, maybe you could try writting freestyle and see how that works out for you. I did however like the theme you had, good work.

--Steph