It sounds a lil odd...when u rhyme....try to just speak how you feel..without the rhyming part
Amanda

I think i commented this amanda..but wtaever i absolutly love it!!!!bryan did do that..haha so good and yet so true..but he will probably take you to homecoming and i'll be left out unless billy or tim(hahah keep it on the dl)or bradly who hasnt stoped asking me out for 2 years take me to homecoming...great job