Have You?

Very unique. I like how you start each stanza, beside the last one, with a question and elaborate on it throughout that stanza. I also like how in the last stanza you change from asking the reader, to telling the reader that you have done all of these things you are asking him/her. Good job. 5/5. Keep it up.

~BJ~

If they even notice you`re watching,

Have you ever wanted to be other people?
Just to see their life,
Their happiness and pain,
Difficulties and pleasures,

[That is soo me]

Now, I loved this poem so much because it sounds just like me. I DO watch other people and wish I was others to see how they feel.. Or possibly to take away their pain... But yeah, a great write.. Wonderful job.

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

And thank you so much for the kind comments... When you said that I had so much talent and all I smiled and a shiver went up my spine-it reallly meant a lot. Thank you.

Very good use of questions. Having read only two of your poems, you remind me a lot of myself with what seems to concern you a lot- and that’s mainly life. Those who we see, want to be- but why do we? I guess everyone finds their answers in many different ways- but for me, it's poetry and good poetry like this =].

If you're interested, I too have written a poem of what imprisoning dreams can do to everyone’s natural life. Check it out if you can, it’s called: To Manipulate a Dream. Please and thank you =].

God bless,
-Elysium.

Good poem i know what you mean because i do the same thing and i feel the same way

Wow. that was amazing and also slightly dark.. it actually scared me a little as i read the last line.. it is as though you are a parasite.. great poem! 5/5