The People

by twisted reality   Jul 23, 2006


My life isn't what it may appear to be.
My parents are horrible to me.
They yell and set early curfews.
That bruise on my arm is brand new.

It's not just my parents, like you might think.
It's my friends too-we're losing our link.
And the longs days all alone at home.
All day, I just seem to roam.

It's not just them either.
Relatives? School? No, it's neither.
The people in my life who make me curse,
Are the ones who make my life just that worse.

xoxo
sammy cakes

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  • 18 years ago

    by Idiosyncratic

    Oh, very sad =(. The flow is definitely an improvement from the other poems, though. Word choice is pretty good. 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    I am not sure about this one, it was good, but not unique, it has some good emotions but not enough, I am not critisising, or trying to put you down. I am being honest.
    It wasn't perfect, but it wasn't that bad, good try, my friend
    xxxxx

  • 18 years ago

    by Normal is the Watchword

    I think the reason that it is rated love is the flow of the poem. Read it outloud and you'll catch unneeded worse such as the word that in the final sentence. Other than that it does have the right emotion to keep it out of the Vent catergory and into the poetry catergory.

    The ones that hurt us most without realizing are the ones who might love us the most : )

  • 18 years ago

    by Kristina

    Okay well i dont understand why this poem has such a low rating when it soo good. it is sad but wonderfuly penned. so full of emotion and truth. keep writing! 5/5

    ~Kristina

  • 18 years ago

    by goddess-glamourpuss

    Nicely done for such a short poem. Loved the final 2 lines such raw emotion.
    Well done keep it up.

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