Good work, I love the part about the clown.

Very nicely done. I really liked the repitition in this, It was wonderful. Such a sad poem though, Keep it up! 5/5

Natalie``

It's really nice...i like it alot...it's def fine as is bu if ur lookin for sumtin to change it a little more imagry maybe...u have some there...and it's really good imagery bu theres a line or 2 that u dont get a very clear image...ur a really good writer....

Very well written! i could relate...keep up the great work! your an awesome writer! 5/5

~Crying Angel~
JennaLeigh

...also thanks for your comment.

Not bad i like it Not somehting I would write only cause they end up never loving me lol but yeah i could feel you were hurting and it was good not many people can actually make people feel the pain your good and thanks u were my first comment I'm going to be adding more poems later if u want to read them just to let you know

oh yeah that peom was because my brother was levaeing me for his gf if u read everyday you will understand

Elisa