Know where you are coming from hon. |
by AnnMarie
This poem was totally awesome! It was soo good1 There was so much emotion and the flow was wonderful, all in all it was great no fixes needed here! |
by 111308
OH Wow! This Was Really Good!! And I Mean Really REally Good! It Was Brilliant! Astounding! Extroadinary! Excellent...Oh Wow So Many Words...I Relate To This Poem So Much! So I Know Exactly How You Feel! Every Word I Could Feel The Pain.....The Emotion Was Deff There And The Flow Was Great! 5/5 You Won Me On This One! Your A Fantastic Writer! |
by Amanda
A sad but hearfelt poem. I really enjoyed this one too. The emotion was great and I can totally understand how you feel. Keep up the great work hun :) |
by LadyPearl
Pretty good. You can still work on the flow. The rhymes kinda sound forced. |
by Natalie
This brought back memorie of when I used to self harm. Very sad poem. Hope you don't self harm though, I be here if you need someone to talk to. =) |
Not too bad... But it's very cliche... Like all the other cutting poems. The rhyming was also a bit cliche... Over all it wasn't a bad read. |
Sammy you have some good content, but I think you are trying to cram it all in. It seemed wordy and forced at times. I do likee your writing though. Wish I had that kind of talent at 14. Loretta |
Good poem!!...i liked the 2nd stanza |
by Tormented
WOW!!! |
by Tormented
WOW!!! |
by LadyPearl
Pretty good. You can still work on your flow. |
by Jessica
Awwww.. you poor thing.. this was so sad.. i liked the last stanza best.. the idea of your scars from your heart showing on your skin was a new one for me.. it flowed pretty well although some of the rhymes were a little awkward, other than that.. wonderful work! 5/5 |
by Megann Lee
I like this poem. I can relate really well. My boyfriend and I are in a fight over cutting and what not. I liked the flow of your poem. It was really sad but it's a true thing that happens. Great Job Hun. |
THis poem was alright in capturing what I hope is not a true story, and sadness that comes with the pain people can not see but that some people wish they could. I do wish you could have described what somebody had actually done or the way you emotionally felt. |
by Tara Kay
Because the poem was about self-harm and the reasons why, I really got into it, and read it twice. |
by X2892
Excellent 5/5 |
by Andi
This is wonderfully written! u captured the depressed emotions of cutting well...its really sad and i can really relate to it....u had a great rhyme scheme and it flowed well....keep up the good work....if u could comment on my poems i'd appreciate it! |
by NoPatience
Rhymes Sounded A Bit Forced And The Flow Could Use Some Work. But Overall It Was A Good Poem That Really Spoke To Me. 5/5 |
by Letty
This poem is very sad. I can really feel your pain through each word. But again here the rhyming seems forced. You have such a wonderful talent for writing that you don't have to force the rhymes hun. Let the words flow, and you will see the amazing change in your work. Besides the rhyming, I thought that everything else was very good. I usally don't read cutting poems because I can't really get into them. But this one held so much emotion that I was able to read right through it. 5/5 I only suggest that you work on the rhyming a bit. Other then that I say keep up the excellent writing and I'll be looking forward to reading more of your work. |