It doesnt need tht much work..i lik it as it is..

I Love it exactly the way it is, It's such a interesting rhyme scheme I dont't think I've actually read a poem like that in about 2 years!! I wouldn't change it it's very ecceftive as it is

Great job
Love
Xx-me-xX

Silence --
I definitely agree that this poem is incomplete. I gave it a 4/5 because the theme is somewhat vague ;; and there are a lot of grammar and spelling mistakes. The rhyming worked out well - but the flow really didn`t. Some lines ran too long, and some ran too short. I would consider adding more detail to this ;; I kept getting distracted while I was reading it. 4/5

Love Much,
Samantha Hollywood

Ur poems relates to me just like MY poems to you. it's really kool how u rhyme it and stuff. really GREAT!

Adrian ('',)

Hey..this is a good poem with an awesome rhyme scheme. however it does need some more work explaining it... is there someone this anger is aimed at??? a certain person, group of people, yourself??? other than that it was still a great poem...it just left me feeling like the last page of the book was missing and i haven't figured out whats going on yet...great analogy i know.jk... oh yea and the whole 19.95 thing was just a stupid sign off line i use with many others.;P

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Todd