I want to meet the angels

The second line in the second stanza needs re-writing. Grammatically it's all over the place.

This is the third poem of yours I have read and they all have followed the same format. I know you can explore poetry as you have a good knowledge of how to construct one. But know I'm going to challenge you do test yourself. I'm challenging you to write a sonnet! You can pick the subject, the emotion and flow but I want you to follow a traditional sonnet set up.

I know you can do it!

Bret

Hey darl a very touching poem. very well written. xx

Very nice poem =) Although it was a bit short, it was very nicely written. I liked the flow, and some of it rhymed lol. Keep it up! 5/5 =) xoxo

Samantha

Amanda --
I chose this poem to r/r/c honestly because the title really jumped out at me. I think that you would get some higher ratings on this if you took out the slang and put it in the 'poems about life' category. More people go there, I`ve honestly never been to this 'internet slang' portion of the site. I would consider taking my advice. But otherwise, the flow and the rhyming was great! Keep this up, I`m going to do another one of your poems.

Love Much,
Samantha Hollywood

I really liked this it is so sweet and uplifting.