A Tribute

These are the only criticisms I have:
spelling mistakes-
top-to
with held- one word witheld

its justt an enjambent line after line (you need to put punctuation at the end of the lines)

okay now to get down to my real thoiughts, loved the poem, loved the subject, loved the emotion and loved the lanuage. I hate writers that use flattery lanuage and dress a poem up to be complicated and someting it is not. your poem is simple, anyone can read this and no what your trying to say and i love it.

you can feel your pain.
The day we said out goodbye's
So many loved ones, so many tears
I don't know how they feel now
But my tears have been with held for years
-that is so true, i remember thinking tomyself a few years after a funeral, do the people that attended still think about that person still feel hurt- and i found it unfair how they could go along with their lives when i was still heartbroken, even if i didn't show it.

I want to wake up a different person
Leave all this anger and hurt
I just want to be forget who I am
Bury it, like we buried you in the dirt
- that is a very strong opening verse, it catches the attention especially the last line, i don't think i've read a poem opening like this, the pain and heartache is in ecvery word of that first sentence..bravo.

well done. fantatsic. xx

Sad. :(

Great work hunnie, you didnt text me back. But yeah... how's life??? Call me some time!!! lol Great work... as usual... i wish i was as good as you Brit. oxoxoxoxo Much love Gurl

This is a fantastic poem. You have put into words everything i feel. Hope to see more of your work.
Jade x