Highly acceptable ending. keep it. I like how you use words that not many people use in their poems - i hate common words. great work.

Gr8 poem. very good rhythm. i like the how u use words that people don't. keep writing:)

Life onced lived in violence

[once]

The ending was a bit of a let down.. Perhaps if you just left out the last stanza and left us hanging..?

It was a good write, nonetheless. You are a good writer.

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

Yea it a shame about the end but i bet that if you keep at it youll find the perfect substitute