Alone (Rictameter)

by Dana   Jul 25, 2006


Alone
Fighting despair;
He's crying himself to sleep.
His parents say I love you, why?
Their voices are loud, and their actions hurt.
He wants to escape this madness,
And does so with a rope.
Finally, he's
Alone

** Criticism welcome with open arms..please!**

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Form of Rictameter

line 1 - 2 syllables - same as line 9
line 2 - 4 syllables
line 3 - 6 syllables
line 4 - 8 syllables
line 5 - 10 syllables
line 6 - 8 syllables
line 7 - 6 syllables
line 8 - 4 syllables
line 9 - 2 syllables - same as line 1
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  • 17 years ago

    by Leanne

    Omg that poem was amazing!!
    Another new style of poem i'll have to give a go, i love reading poems in different styles it makes me try new things, i doubt i'll be able to do one as good as this though.
    This is definately 5/5 the imagery was brilliant and vocab was great!!
    Well done.

  • 17 years ago

    by lost in lovee

    I liked it but it should have been long like u culd have made in loner but i liked it 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni

    You have an amazing talent for writing dear. your poems are so sophisticated and very well written. 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    Wow, great style,
    you are a great poet, and now one of my favorite

  • 18 years ago

    by Polly

    Wow this is amazing! It is so powerful, the structure and the words fitted together really well making a big impact. You did well with the syllable count because it didn't sound restricted when I read it... if you know what I mean lol. Well done 5/5
    Polly

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