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by Bill Turner
Nicely done.
by Simon Hayes
Sad and tormenting piece. The flow was good, though I suggest you get rid of the "with's" in this bit: For he admitted he fell in love... **with you; your smile; your heart.** You never expected this sudden change; never thought of that crazy part. It just makes it flow a little nicer. Tragic, real and containing a great warning at the end. The heart is a frail possession that needs to be cared for.