Oh my dear god. This was wow. I really liked the 'close the door, lock him out' ..and the ending aswell. That was such a sad poem, Kaylee. But, It was great, as per usual. Tehe. You had really short lines, but with powerful words which made the poem alot stronger. It was fantastic. Keep it up! 5/5

Natalie``

A very different style that I've never seen before. I liked it, it was very unique. Each '-' made a pause and made each line have more impact. The imagery was great, like little fragments coming together. Great Piece! I loved it.

I love the flow of this piece-Short lines but you put so much power and depth into each one. I love the repitition of:
"......Close the door,
........Lock him out"

It really made the poem stronger--Great write-Keep it up 5/5

AHH! Very emotional. But very well written. It sums up what you're feeling way down inside of you. But...isn't that what poetry is about? I can relate A LOT! Great write! You're a fantastic writer! Keep it up! =) xoxo

Samantha

I love this poem it is very different!! The flow was there and it left me wanting more and I really understood it! Great job five5

-AnnMarie

This one made me feel really uneasy.
The language was strong and I liked that it flowed well too but I don't know what makes me feel uneasy abvout it. sorry :(

Kaylee --
I`m just bored, so commenting on people`s work. =D Hope you don`t mind.

I gave this poem a 4/5 because of the flow and the rhyming. In poetry, as I`m sure you know, flow is very important. I just couldn`t get a secure grasp of flow anywhere in this poem - that part needs some work. But the rhyming also messed me up - only one of your stanzas rhymed. I don`t know if this was an unrhyming poem, and you didn`t realize that you had rhymed- but you did, and it kind of messed me up. I would either make all stanzas rhyme, or make none of them rhyme. Just my opinion. =D

Love Much,
Samantha Hollywood

Not too bad... a bit weak at the ending. I did like the beginning though.

Good job

xDarksuicidex 4.5

Another great poem Kaylee. You really like using the pause. That really gets me thinking. Good job :)

Again, your poems are really good and have matured a lot. Keep on writing!