Wow~

This was actually really good. Your flow and rhyming were great, and it was written really well. I don't think I can see anything at all that I'd change. =) Keep it up~

Natalie``

So...depressing

Wow that was a sad poem. I liked the 3rd, 4th, 5th and 6th stanzas. They were really well written, and I liked the fact that you started out with some powerful words. The rhymes and the flow in this one was great as well.

I loved the openings you used for each stanza, and I think that the poem flowed really well. Nothing I would change, 5/5!