I thought the rhythm was a little off in some parts of the poem, but that is all that I saw a bit flawed. The words really took away the piece, making it visual, and greatly described. I liked it.

Like I said on the other site. This stunned me. And I learned new words! Tehe. It was great, Kaylee. I hope you know that. Sometimes it sucks though, cause I never have anything to say in my comments. I'm always saying the same thing, lol. But you already know what I think of this, it's a wonderful write, just keep on writing, mmkay? 5/5

Natalie``

Yet again, I like the poem and it's strong, but the way you address the poem seems to throw me off..

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

Kaylee --
This was definitely an improvement in my mind from the last poem I read. The flow of this just seemed to work better, and the fact that nothing rhymed was nice too. I think you definitely did a great job on this ;; keep it up! Thanks much for posting in my thread! 5/5

Love Much,
Samantha Hollywood

Wow Kaylee, you poems have matured alot over the past few weeks. I have noticed that. You are definitely learning a lot more and you are using it well. This was a really deep poem and you really used the perfect words. You have an amazing talent in combining words. Awesome stuff.

I really liked this poem, it was very different than the stuff I normally read and I appreciate this. Your word choices were emaculate (sp?). The only thing I can criticise on is instead of putting all the periods before "Hush. It's our secret." and "We must never tell." I think that it would look a little bit better if you decided to put them in brackets instead. Other than that I loved this poem. Way to go

Again I didnt get what you were talking about but I learned more words *ill look them up in a dictionary later* But the way you used them was great so 5/5

Excellent job, if a person really tries to think more on the deeper side, they'll be able to get what you're talking about.
To me: it's a poem about broken love
"Crude unadorned skin
Thirst craved fingertips"
-Reminds me about lust

Grieved rejected-Stained,
Mourned crestfallen sight,
Lacerated soul distressed,
Blackout-Lost recollection (memories that cause sadness and joy)

I really like this and can see a talent, unfortuantaley i didnt really understand the message u were trying to convey but i like the mystery of it, well done

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Dear Kaylee,

I learnt some new words from you. Thanks for the same. You simply rock. Sometimes I do feel from where does a teen like you get such great thoughts. Anyways, 5/5 of course.