Ok, I'm going to try to be brutally honest...

I thought that the flow of this was horrible, although I did like the vocab. I liked the way how you expressed how you felt in his arms and such, as well. But I hated the format. It made me confused, and I didn't know what the rhyming scheme was at many points. Just a few suggestions to work on. Hope you don't take it the wrong way. =) 3/5 xoxo

Samantha