In Darkened Skies Tonight

by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex   Jul 27, 2006


This lullaby will sing,
In darkened skies tonight,
Listen closely to their song,
Listen to their fearsome bite.
Listen closely deep inside,

Listen as the angel's lied.
Press your ears to the ground,
Hear this lullaby play around,
Listen to its torched cry,
If you hear this lullaby.

Watch them break and cry,
Listen to a lullaby,
Hear the angels lie,
In darkened skies tonight.

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  • 18 years ago

    by DepthofPassion

    This is a great poem...However I'm not sure how I feel about the last line...it just doesn't work for me.

  • 18 years ago

    by -The-Undying-

    Excelent yet very boring

  • 18 years ago

    by Arcane Blondie

    The title of this poem really caught my attention, and I love how it repeats through the poem-- Once again, this poem is short, but its very strong too!

    5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Samantha Hollywood

    XDarkSuicidex --
    Again, I had to give this poem a 4/5. The flow was forced ;; and the format didn`t work out. All of your stanzas should have the same amount of lines in them ;; and yours didn`t. There was some vague rhyming in here ;; but I couldn`t tell whether or not it was intentional, or unintentional. There is definitely room for improvement here, but you didn`t do badly. 4/5.
    Thanks much for your comment on my poem, it`s been nice reading your work

    Love Much,
    Samantha Hollywood

  • Good job good word choice the words you use make it so easy to relate to the poem, its powerful and they make you a strong writer

    Keep it up!

    Bri