Your descriptions are good bu I found this poem a bit more sad then dark. Your words are good too but maybe you should repeat the word listen a bit less. Your strong points with the word listen are the first and last time you write it. Maybe change the other ones to other words.

I loved the title "In Darkened Skies Tonight", I'll tell you that. I think that your message is really original, and you expressed it quite well. I usually don't get dark poems, so I can't really help you improving it. I'll just tell you that I like the theme, your descriptions, and your word choice.

Good job!

Keep writing.

XoXo
Gaby

Have to agree that 'listen' is a little over used for such a short poem and is 'torched' meant to be 'tortured'? (I think that would go better)
Other than that I loved hte theme and the imagery was great.

Listen as the angel's lied.

[I think you should just have "lie" instead of "lied" ..up to you though.]

Press your ears to the ground,
Hear this lullaby play around,
Listen to its torched cry,

^^I liked those lines alot!!

This was a pretty good poem, I thought it was different to the poems by you that I've read so far. Excellent work, Keep it up! 5/5

Natalie``

Good job good word choice the words you use make it so easy to relate to the poem, its powerful and they make you a strong writer

Keep it up!

Bri

XDarkSuicidex --
Again, I had to give this poem a 4/5. The flow was forced ;; and the format didn`t work out. All of your stanzas should have the same amount of lines in them ;; and yours didn`t. There was some vague rhyming in here ;; but I couldn`t tell whether or not it was intentional, or unintentional. There is definitely room for improvement here, but you didn`t do badly. 4/5.
Thanks much for your comment on my poem, it`s been nice reading your work

Love Much,
Samantha Hollywood

The title of this poem really caught my attention, and I love how it repeats through the poem-- Once again, this poem is short, but its very strong too!

5/5

Excelent yet very boring

This is a great poem...However I'm not sure how I feel about the last line...it just doesn't work for me.