Taleeeee babe i loved this poem...I really think this my favorite poem by you..even tho I have nooooo idea what the meaning is...it still flowed and rhymed very very well..it was just perfect! i loved it!!! -hugs- xoxo

This one had a real dark edge to it especially if it is about abuse as I thought. Your choice of vocab is great and these lines

No evidence to prove the wrong,
While simple words can be spoken,
Forceful actions is what's strong.

gave it a strong finish

Hmm...This is another one of those thinking poems. Ugh lol. So hard for me in the morning >.< I still loved it. It had so much emotion to it, and it really says how you -really- felt. I liked the flow, and the rhyiming scheme. 5/5 =) xoxo

Samantha

This is another great poem courtz xoox

Wow Nat, that sounds so much like a rape scene. It was a horrific read. I hope this wasn't based on something that happened to you. Otherwise I'm gonna have to come down there and kick some @$$. Lol. Well, I just hope I got it right. I loved the rhymes and the flow of this poem it was great. It really did make a tragic story.

Aww talee.. you okay? this really got to me.. your words were powerful and strong.. it flowed well and all the rhymes worked.. the title really draws the reader in.. and i like the fact that you made the poem slightly mysterious.. nice job! 5/5

Talee --
Another wonderful poem. You`re a very talented writer - but you knew that, didn`t you? I liked the rhyming in this poem -- it changed frequently, but still had a pattern to it. It was really great, and the flow was perfect throughout the entire poem. I`m definitely a bit confused as to the meaning of it all, and I`ll probably PM you, but it was really great. Loved it. 5/5.

Love Much,
Samantha Hollywood

Wow, you can really pack a punch with you words. They hit the heart and keep going...amazing... strong word choice and meaning can make the diffrence... Great job keep it up

I am wondering what this poem means to you and the story behind it. it is a very deep poem and i could relate to it, i was wondering if what it means to you is the same thing that i relate to the poem. pm me and let me know....
brokenheart247

What I didn't like first,
I didn't like the off and on rhyming scheme. abab then aabb.
I didn't like the fact that the last stanza has 3 lines, when all the others had 4.

What I did like,
Your flow was good when you were hitting 4 liners. The rhyming while mixed, was great.
The message was incredible. It touched me. Made me sad because I completely got it. Well if I didn't then your poem has 2 meanings. Yours and mine. lol

The phrase "Evil demon who creeps at night" gave me chills, because it reminds me of one of my poems called "The Darkness" sadly inspire by what happened to my cousin whe she was little. He has many names.

Wow another awesome job~loves brittany

Wow, I loved the first stanza. The whole poem is amazing, but the first stanza was the one that I felt the strongest. I think that your word choice was excellent, very appropiate and poetic. I liked the theme, and the way you expressed everything, it feels so original.

Great job! 5/5

Keep writing.

XoXo
Gaby

This is the first poem I've read but it was amazing. You really have alot of talent. :)

As much as this p0em is sad and heartfelt umm the w0rds u used again, it was like amazing!!! l0t 0f meaning behind ur p0ems ; y0u can tell. great j0b expressing urself. xx

Wow, im stunned. this was really good. youre a good writer. your choice of words was good, and it seemed to flow nicely as well. good job.
Driver

Wow...this was geat! i remember that dwelt person was bagging on it..well i think it's great!!! i lliked the wording, it had a wide vocabulary. and you used some great descriptions...5/5

Oooh very interetsing. i really liked the way you alternated between your structure (i.e. aabb abcb aabb abcb)
yeah, that was real;ly effective. and the words clung to each other and made the reader read faster which gave the whole feeling of pain and sufferieng and a bit of fear : ) it was really great.

the flow was especially great, i really really really liked it 5/5 i was very impressed : D
-Suzie

Your poems are so amazing. I'm just like in awe. I don't know what to say, I like lost all the words in my mind. All I can think of is "WOW!" So..I'll stick with that.

Breath taking write---I love the beginning,,,It's very strong---This poem is definately sad, but has a dark twist to it; Everything is very well worded and flows nicely---

5/5 Great work

Wow, very powerfull. takes me back to places I don't want to remember.bone chilling. Awesome job 5/5
Loretta