My Aching Heart

by Kayla   Jul 27, 2006


I loved you so much and
i dont think you realized.
but then i remember what you did
and the tears fall from my eyes

You broke my heart...
for me a pain that\'s rare
What hurt the most
Was that you didnt seem to care.

When i needed you the most,
you were already gone.
The one that caused this pain
i'm telling "Fix everything that's wrong."

Missing you so much it hurts.
Wishing everything was ok.
Wanting you here, by my side
to wipe the tears away.

...am i just lucky to have loved at all?

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  • 18 years ago

    by XxChelseaXx

    Another great poem! This is sad..but i can also relate to this one. Sometimes love sucks, and other times it can be the most wonderful thing in life. but then again, i'm only going on 16 so i have a lot of time to tell.

    ~Chelsea

  • 18 years ago

    by Jenni

    Wow. I've been in your shoes before honey, and this is such a good poem to describe the breaking of a heart. i loved this one, it had to have been my favorite of yours that I read. wonderfully written! 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    This was really good. Emotion was very well conveyed. The only thing I would say is when you are writing you should always capitalize where appropriate (e.g. when writing 'I'). It makes it look better.

    Good job.

  • 18 years ago

    by Jessica

    Awh, sweetie that was quite sad. The flow was a little bit awkward but still worked. The descriptions were good but could have more detail. And the emotion was clear, nice job hun. Keep it up 4/5

  • 18 years ago

    by xxEvilAngelxx

    Another good poem!! The only suggestion I have is to change this line: 'Wanting you here beside me' to 'Wanting you here, by my side' ---I just think that would sound better, its only my opinion though. Keep writing!!!

    xxEvilAngelxx

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