Very nicely done. Has a lovely smooth flow and a nice sad edge. I loved the imagery in this it was great
5/5

Hey Emma! really well written. they're getting better. it makes a lot more sense to em now. Lol. really brilliant. so much talent!! Lol, you rock my world!!! Love u always.
-Snoo

"I know this was my last of breath."
[I think you should write "I know this was my final breath"] To me it sounded better. Great poem, I liked it all the way through. Was very dark indeed. Interesting piece.

FANTASTIC poem!!!!
Very Dark! i liked it very much!!!
You are soo talented!!!
Keep Up the Great work!!
5/5

Torm

Very dark! Gave me chills and the title really caught my attention; made me want to read-I wasn't disappointed-This is an amazing write-I love the word choice and flow----5/5 Good job in the contest! =-)

Now this was a great dark poem. Wowee-- Excellent work, Emah!

The flow again was good, same with the rhyming, there was also some great imagry in there too. Lovely job. Keep it up, hun!

Natalie``