Grandparents we became as we got old
[I think you should change 'got' to 'grew']

It was a cute poem lol. Made me smile and go awww! Taha. I liked the different rhyme scheme you used lol. It worked really well with the poem. The flow was flawless, and I just loved the poem, you really don't know how huge my smile on my face is right now. =D Taha. Loved it!! 5/5

Natalie``

P.S. You did get the poem right, in a way. It's more about it did happen, but I can't prove it. =)

Well once again, It was a great great love poem...I'm guessing you are really in love, or you just have a great imagination..either way you portray your feelings very very well..i love all of your work..you're very talented! great job 5/5

I thought this was a great poem, full of feeling. You are very talented 5/5

Awesome poem and I love the ending - flawless - 5/5

Wow!! Darien, your words ring out loud and true. That's the way true love is meant to be, right: forever wrapped in a cocoon of love.

well done my friend.

peace
shobhana

Awwwwwwwwwwwww! darien, you are such a sweetie! this was an awesome poem and i couldnt keep the smile off of my face.. it flows so smoothly and easily.. the rhymes work perfectly and your choice of words was adorable..cuute poemm! 5/5

Darien --
Wow! Very impressive! First of all, I have to say that the title of this poem was really catchy ;; I loved it! I also really enjoyed the way you rhymed, it was different, and made it more fun to read. It`s always good to keep the readers attention, and you did just that! The flow was amazing as well ;; everything fit perfectly! You did a wonderful job on this, thanks so much for posting on my thread!! 5/5

Love Much,
Samantha Hollywood

Your poetry is amazing and this poem is incredible. Wow! You bring depth and emotion to your writing and I have seen your writing improve over the months, from good to great.

As always Darien you have a way to set the scene of people in love without having experience it as these two people in this poem have. I thought the rhymes were pretty good, nothing forced just perfect flow, and your word choice had some deepness to it.

You're a rare talent, Darien. I sat down to read this and thought "Oh, 3 lines of rhyme in pairs, this is going to get corny fast."

But you proved me wrong, although I am sure given a little more thought you could have avoided rhyming "toll" with "told", fella!

But this rolls along pleasantly and contains a warmth that is rare on this site. I rarely give out 5s unless I really mean it. but this is a surefire 5. Well done.

Aww. That's so cute. I loved how you expressed your feelings through a poem for this particualr topic. I liked the fhyming, and the flow was good in places, but could use some work here and there. Good job! 5/5 =) xoxo

Samantha

Awesome poem Darien! I'm getting close to the last two paragraphs so your poem really hits home with me.
Nate aka "The Tie Guy"

This poem rushed me along to fast. I think it was great, but it should have been a 3 part(er.) One for the lovers, one for the married with kids, and one for the grandparents. I would have loved that. :)

The message was crystal clear.

I rated it 5/5 because of one thing... your rhyming scheme. I always look for originality. I loved it and will have to try it one day. aaabbb

The 3rd stanza gets jumbled up a bit, because the it seem to have broken off the aaabbb scheme.. the whole thing rhymes.
Well good luck and thanks for this refreshing poem.

David Velazquez

Very nice. i absolutely loved it. keep it up.

Oh my that was a GREAT poem! You are a very talented writer! Keep it up.

The end was coming and nearly here
A few more hours until the New Year
And love could be sensed in the air.

This seemed to throw the rhyming a little bit, but it picked up by the end... Now, I have a lot to say about this poem but I won't. My boyfriend and I have never met, though, I'll tell you that, and he's coming this New Year's. When I started to read this my eyes went wide and I couldn't stop -- this is exactly what we plan for our future. Yes, I'm young, but love is found in many places. I loved this poem because it hit so close to my heart..

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

P.S. I'll be reading this to my boyfriend. ^.^

Interesting rhyming theme. As always, beautiful job and perfect flow. nice use of descriptions.

You are a great writer, i hope i can be as good as you eventualy. The rhyming scheme was new to me, i've never tried it. I like love poems, they always make me smile and yours made me smile even more. great job.

That's so sweet and awesome. at the end dying dosen't seem that bad. even when ur dying together. very good job:)

Hmmmmm good write! It was a little original though! You know been there done that....... The flow was great and the structure was there, good job
-annmarie