Brothers

I too have 2 brothers ,one older and one younger.I love them both very much ,and with christmas here again it makes me realise that the time has flown by so quickly and its been a while since I last spoke to my younger brother ,but then I guess thats what having families of out own now can do.My older brother is living with us right now ,he does not have kids and so he comes here for christmas ,which I always love having him.

Nice point, but again, I didn't like it.

This didn't seem like a poem. It seemed more like someone asking you a question and this was just your answer to it. There was no flow, rythym...

Just seemed like you wrote this in 5 seconds without a thought.