I like the shortness in your words.

Wow. excellent poem. =) ur emotions are so clear in this poem. this stanza stands out a lot to me:

"She cant take the pain
Its to much to bare
There's no possible way
To get him out of here"

great work, 5/5. =)
xxx

Hmm. It's good. It's a question as to what is exactly going on, but I like it. I like it a lot. Excellent work. Keep writing!

~~spanish367

I really liked how you switch from She to I at the end.. This poem is really strong and a great read. Great job.

xDarkSuicidex 5.5