ThE HarDnEsS Of LiFe

by FiLFY_GorGeZz   Jul 28, 2006


LiFeS WaLLz FaLL s0 s0 HarD,
CraShIn N grInDiN YuR BoNeS As iT DuS.
YuH Us3 aLL YuR sTreNgTh TrYiN 2 HoLd Th3m Up,
BuH ThE CoNtRoL OF OuR LiFe Is No LoNgEr oUrs.
YuH R LiEiN DeR WaTcHiN iT aLL FaLL,
It DusNt MaTTa HoW LouD YuH SkReAm Or CrI.
YuR EfFoRtS N PoWeR R aLL TieD Up,
aLL yUh KaN Du Is WaTcH iT aLL dIe.
TeArs FaLL DoWn,BoNeS r BrOkEn,
HarTs R ToRn In2 TiNy PiEcEs.
EvErytHiNg PlAyS BaK iN yUr MiNd 4 Da LsT Time
YuR DrEaMs,MeMoRiEs & WiShEs.
ThE PpLe YuH LoVe So DeArLy & cHeRiSh
TrY 2 ReAcH OwT 2 YuH WiF TheIr CriEs.
YuH CaN NoT ShOwT BaK 2 DeM
BuH ThE MoTiOn Of yuR EyEs ArE eNuF 2 SaY Gd ByE.
DarKnEsS SuRowNdS YuH
sWaLLowS YuH iN2 4eVa.
YuR r aLoNe N EmPtY In
EnDLeSS DarkNeSS LiViN 4EvA...

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  • 18 years ago

    by ShadowedPhoenix

    Agreed with the above comments, ThIS is rEAllY DiStRAcTIng! It takes all the feeling away from the poem, as the reader is so distracted and unpleased because instead of enjoying the poem the now have to decipher the meaning and message! Also NO NUMBERS and NO SLANG yur=you're yuh=you (I think), to me it's as if you are trying to be a gangsta or something lol and it really makes the poem lose credibility! I would have probably given this a 3 although the poem is so well written it's worthy of a 5 but i cant rate it so because of what i've mentioned! But congrats on a good poem!

  • 18 years ago

    by Tormented

    It was a good poem.
    But try not to use cpital letters in the middle!
    It makes it harder to read and doesnt look good in poetry.
    And yeah dont use numbers instead of words. But otherwise it was very good!!

    TORM

  • 18 years ago

    by Robie Lincer

    That was a good poem! but try not to use cappital letters in the middle of the word,,, cos it gets harder to read,,, but it was a good poem!

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