"I love you more then life"
[more 'that' life]

"I live you more then death"
[Not quite sure what you are trying to say in this line. Live = Love?]

Sorry.. the rest of my comment got cut off.. Just wanted to say it was a good piece. Keep on writing, but make sure you edit your work.

Oh wow! Loved this piece! Omgawsh, it gave me shivers. The good ones, mind you! I believe YOU should be the famous one. =)

LOVE LOLLI

Aside from a few mistakes, this was a great poem. It is sad, but i like it. You have a good rhyme going. Keep it up.

That poem really gave me goose bumps! very sad yet its reality which makes it worse! the poem itself was great! alot of emotion! and thanx for commenting and rating one of mine..appreciate it

Gawjuss poem..great writing.

I'm really in love with your poems. I just can't get away from them their so deep and when I read them I feel as though they where written out for me. I feel the same way at the moment my friends in coma =[
xx Rox xx