The 'wanna's' I think should be want.. because it just sounds better.

The poem was good, a bit weak in emotion but had a certain flow to it.

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

Alright we know you want to cry but can't. But you should understand that when writing a poem some people will love narratives such as this and some people want to know more about the emotional side of a poem. I'm more of a I want to figure it out and not be told straight out type of person.

for you are not here
[Describe how this person affected you by not being there. Do you hear their voice at night? See memories when you close your eyes?]

Nancy --
Hey! I think you may have over-commented me a little, lol. So I decided to comment on another one of yours. =D This is really good, the flow and the rhyming was perfect. Whoever it is written about, is very lucky to have a mom // friend like you! I was reading your profile, and see that you`ve got a 12 model daughter? Wow, she must be pretty! But back to the poem, you did a wonderful job. Keep this up, and God bless. Have a wonderful day.

Love Much,
Samantha Hollywood

Hey. This poem flow really well- It's not perfect but dont change a thing, It sounds genuine- i like it.
Beth