So confused

While th e poem does show what the message is: Confusion, it doesn't go into the emotions. Alright here's my suggestion, since this poem is a true story you should focus on how you feel such as do you feel your stomach all in knots your mind being a colorwheel turning and blurring all thoughts? Another thing you should do is maybe limit pronouns to give the poem much more meaning and os peopl can relate to it by seeing their own meaning in the words.

Nancy --
I think that the intent of this poem was very good ;; probably shouldn`t have been in the sad category, though. Maybe miscellaneous. But anyway, back to your poem..
I had to give it a 4/5 for a couple of reasons. The flow was really unsteady ;; just didn`t really work out too well. I would consider reading this out loud to yourself, and then revising some of the lines. Some of them ran too long, but most of them too short. The rhyming - why did only the last line rhyme with anything? Maybe it was unintentional ;; but it really didn`t sound like it.
There is definitely room for improvement in this poem, but I think you did an okay job. I`ll be checking out some of your poems in the near future, and even a couple more right now. 4/5. Have a great day.

Love Much,
Samantha Hollywood

Hmmm. You really got the feeling of being confuses down to a tee because now I'm confused. Perhaps if you had added a little about what it is that confuses you it might help.

The end was a bit of a let down for a 'dark' poem... But it was pretty good nonetheless. I'm not really sure what to say.

xDarkSuicidex 4.5