And guidance thru the day, His will to know

[Through ..not thru]

But wow. This was a GREAT Ottava Rima. I've done a few of these, and they sucked, but this was great. Like wow. Excellent choice of wording, t'was fantastic. Keep it up, you're talented.

Natalie``

That was so sad yet so sweet. The vocab choice is wonderful the whole thing flows so well.
You have a wonderful talent.