I don't think this needs work. I love it. I guess I'm kinda stupid though, I don't really get the meaning of the last line... Anyways, I love all your work.

The last line kinda threw me off but other than that rewording and breaking into wut u want is all that can be done...i love it...repetition was nice also...
love ya lots,
sore

Hi i agree is a well good poem, but last line i wod say needs a rewording a bit, mayb "she left herself crushed in his hands" if thats what you are trying to say, is cool if not i tend 2 interpret things wierrdly.

Pretty good, i like how you wrote it. short and deep. keep it up!

Aw wow i luv this so much ,, dont change it its so perfect .... 5.5

-xx- leah -xx-

Wow. That was amazing I love it 5/5

I can't explain what I think of it.... It's so good.