Oh, so nice. I liked it, how you defined things with simple words, bringing to mind different scenes.
Two friends together, a child dying in a bed, a woman betraying her husband...
I thought of all these things.

//T.L.//

Amazing piece! I love how the lines are short and are descriptions of the last line--Each new stanza brings another burst of curiosity! Very unique write--Enjoyed reading =D

5/5

This was sensational. I got into the poem,its very descriptive. It was a great read. Enjoyed it very much.5/5 Thabnks for reading some of my poems, I always read and comment when someone does it for me. Thanks Loretta

OMG, how true this poem is! Great work!

This poem sums it so eloquentlty It has such an easy flow it relaxed my mind to recieve its powerful message

Well, when i comment on a poem, i usually like to pick a stanza that I really liked and post that in my comment, but i cant do that for this poem, because i really loved everyone of these stanzas, the way you mastered this poem was amasing, you are very talented, great work.

--Steph

Ooo! I liked this poem a LOT! Lol. It's so short and simple, but it means a lot to some people. It really does. I loved the flow. It was so easy and didn't have very many words to have to fumble around with. Terrific write! =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

That was a very creative poem. I liked the rhymes, it was really different. Flowed nicely too. Great word choice.

Sheena --
This was really good! I LOVED the last stanza ;; I feel that it was the best of them all. This poem definitely held a lot of emotion, and, the flow was perfect. The rhyming, spelling, and grammar was perfect as well. Wonderful job!! 5/5

Love Much,
Samantha Hollywood

Wow, im left speechless. this give a good description of each characteristic, and is well worded. flows gracely too. excellent.
Driver

Awww I loved this poem..Alot it was really sweet..and you wrote it wonderfully, the flow and rhythm was great!! good job hun! 5/5

Excellent! very accurate descriptions, they fit together very well, the flow is great and the idea is very original and well expressed. all the ingredients for a truly amazing poem!

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-bsicuit-

Wow.. yet again you have surprised me.. i loved how you used yourself to describe many different emotions and mindsets.. wonderful work! 5/5

Wicked poem!! Really liked it!!

Beautiful job. I love the topic and the way you described different everyday words. Perfect ending

Hmm,this one got me thinking. I like the simplicity and the words were real but for me the terms 'lust', 'love' etc mean more to me. It was good but if you could make some of the vocabulary and terms a little less cliched etc it would be better (sorry for being fussy and nitpickity but that's just who i am, like to be honest)

Over all it was a good poem 4/5 from me

Good poem..i liked how you described each thing and what it was made up off...it was deffinatly different:)...Awesome poem..My favourite stanza was the last one
"A happy time,
Everyone's strife,
You'll never forget,
That I am Life."..it was for sure the perfect way to end this poem:):)5/5

AwwAwwAww!! It's so cute. Ohmy. I love it so much the style and everything was purely amazing and perfect in my eyes. Great Job!

Amazing...Absolutely true, and catchy. The whole thing kept me reading....Beautiful, and so many things beyond it! Wonderful.
-Shauni

Thats a good written poem! loved the way you described Death, love lust, hate... it was very good

Keep it up!