Aww that's sad.. but very well written.. great work 5/5 xx

Goody good good. i like this poem. it had alot of good thoughts within it. though, i must say, i was disappointed with the last line. i think it was because there are two rhyming words so close together on the same line. in my opinion, the poem would have been better with a stronger end.

brad

P.S. thanks for commenting on my poem 'Giving up the fight'. your comments are always welcome...and always vote on people work

Aw it had such emotion and real feeling to it. I love it!
kayla

This is really good---well written---theres a nice flow to it and is very gripping good job