Can u accept my advice please? i am looking forward to see this poem convert into a song. this one rocks. truly fabulous. i enjoyed it thoroughly. 5/5.

I have to admit I wasn't sure if this was going to be any good but after reading the first few lines, you had me convinced. I really did like it. Glad it wasn't a true story because it really sucks when that kinda thing happens. I speak from experience (from a girls standpoint though). You're a great poet and keep up the good work. I hope to read more from you soon!

This was really good! I think you had a lot to say, but you didn't know how to say it. Did you have an experience like that? Well keep writing! Great Job! Rate and comment me!
~~~~~~{*LACEY*}

Real gud, i loved it so emotional.

Awesome*

Wow I really loved this
I could relate to it
Your very good
Keep on writing
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Thanks and ttyl-Alex

You are a wonderful writer, I like how you use very great detail. 5/5

Excellente!

-Taylor

Simply amazing!!!!

Thats a good poem makes me think about something to me... i like i alot though..

I really like the title to this, it's very cathchy. The poem was really good as well. The rhyming was great and flowed perfectly. And you worded it very well, especially the first line. After reading that, I already knew I'd love this poem. Great job! 5/5

Wow. I love the wording in this poem Darien. The flow was absolutely amazing. I'd have to say the third stanza was my favorite out of all of them. Great Work.

I think the first stanza is my favorite. I really like your style in this - the AAAA, BBBB, etc. rhyming scheme. I have difficulty rhyming at all, let alone in a consecutive pattern like that. Great job.

Wow awesome poem.
so much power in the words you used.
wonderfully written.

sophie:)

That was excellent. It probably would've made a great song. An excellent read.

xoxoxoxox
Ravyn Sintre

Another AMAZING job.......Wow...I wish I could write this great....Amazing writer you are!!

Yet again, another superb poem. You are truely talented, I added you to my favorites. Great work, 5/5. :)

I have no critisim at all for this, you are an amazing writer, keep up the good work.