Meaning of..

by Nelle   Jul 31, 2006


Inner thoughts

Luscious dreams
Overwhelming laughs
Vicious schemes
Effective touch

Yours forever
Officially forsaken?
Unlikely to leave

(Okay i really have no idea what i was trying to do here...i just wanted to write something for "I love you" and well that is what i got! If it doesn't make sense, I'm sorry...But, honest opinions would be great.)

    report violation
0


Did You Like This Poem?

Latest Comments

  • 18 years ago

    by redLatina

    Nice one!

  • 18 years ago

    by Nancy

    It is a good start, however I'm missing something here. It stops too abrupt, so it doens't flow right!

  • 18 years ago

    by Tormented

    YES!! it DOES make sense!!
    This poem was short and GREAT!!!
    yes it got the meaning of I LOVE YOU out clearly..well quite clearly!!
    AWESOME job!!
    Keep Writting!

  • 18 years ago

    by LockedInEternity

    I thought i was a really good Acrostic:)...and it got the meaning of i LOVE YOU out very nicely so dont worry about that:)...Keep up that great poetry!!

  • 18 years ago

    by Jessica

    Of course it makes sense.. it was beautifully written and i loved the short lines.. they really added effect.. it was a little like a haiku structure except that the syllable count wasn't right.. wonderful work! 5/5

Read All Comments (7)

More Poems By Nelle