Walking In Circles

by holly   Aug 1, 2006


You make my heart go crazy
but your way too young for me
you make me feel so loved
but you're always getting drunk
you are so fun to be with
but you are so unlike me
you are such a great friend
and i do not want to lose that
you act like you care
but there will always be someone else there
cause your forever flirting with another girl
but i love you with all those faults
I'm lost without you
and dammit i don't know what to do

I'm walking in circles
never getting anywhere
i love you, it's true
but i can't work out what to do
if you'd just hold me
or tell me what you feel
guide me and tell me
what you want of me
maybe id break out of these endless circles.
please set me free,
free of this love.

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  • 18 years ago

    by ღ»Lσιѕ«ღ

    I didnt really like this poem, i think this poem has potential tho! Maybe if you organized a bit more, expanded your vocab and rechecked your spelling. I have to give this a 4/5!!

  • 18 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    Good job, try to expand your vocab and recheck your spelling, your should be you're in the second line. Keep it up

  • 18 years ago

    by Megann Lee

    I like this poem. I honestly think age doesn't matter if you love someone but anyway. I loved it. Deserves a five. Great work.

  • 18 years ago

    by Polly

    This is good but I feel if you split it into more, equal stanzas the flow would be better. Other than that it's good, I like the emotion in it. Well done,
    - Polly

  • 18 years ago

    by Tainted Beauty

    I didnt really like this poem, it seemed like your thoughts were all over the place, mayeb you should try to organize you thoughts a bit more, because Im sure this poem has potential.

    --steph

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